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First two chapters in the story of Junko, a chaste Japanese woman. Her attempt to reconcile with her estranged betroth begins to spiral out of control.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 5.00
- BE: 4.00
- Characters: 4.50
- Technical: 4.50
Snorty
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
This is quite well written. It has a lot of detail in it which I love and I like the POV as well.
The only complaint I have is that in some places, there seems to be too much going on at once and sometimes requires rereads to understand whats going on.
Overall, though, awesome story and I'm really hoping it will be continued. Eagerly looking forward to Chapter 3.
Mary
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
This is very well written. I hope you continue you it a lot. I really like stories from the woman's point of view, and especially ones that deal with the difficulty of fitting cloths and such.
If you do take requests, I'd like a little bit more description of the weight of her chest, and actually how large they are. It was hard to get an idea of how large her bosom actually was, only that she had grown a great deal.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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