the_almighty_wolf_lord@yahoo.co.uk
Average Scores:
- Overall: 2.00
- BE: 2.75
- Characters: 1.50
- Technical: 1.00
Ninja In The Night
Overall= 2, BE= 3, Characters= 1, Technical= 1
Your story just lacked. It lacked substance, form, and good writing. It seems that either English is not your first language, or you have not become accustomed to writing yet. I recommend that you take a good look at this story, read it to yourself out loud, and try to think of "Why does it sound wrong when I say it but not read it"; while trying to make it a bit more readable. As stated before, Paragraphs and periods are your friend. Best of luck next story.
calebb
Overall= 1, BE= 3, Characters= 2, Technical= 1
I know the stories on this site get pretty out there, but some things still need to make a bit of sense. The main character does certain things that there are no given reasons for.
Russian Judge
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 2, Technical= 1
Why re-upload? Try one word: PARAGRAPHS. This is one big text block. Put a blank line between paragraphs. Put individual speeches by different characters in separate paragraphs. This would have been a good tentacle-porn story, if it was more readable.
Baconman
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1
Son, stories are not like cheese. You can't toss them in a cave for months at a time and pull them out expecting something wonderful.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
Due to comment spam, any new posts with http in them will be destroyed.
