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The Overflowing Bra

Saw 8
The Jigsaw killer strikes in an unusual Fassion...

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Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 3

Very good post.Really thank you! Keep writing.

Above Ground Pool
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 4

I am getting married on the 15th of November. Congratulate me! Then will be here rarely!...

Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 2, Technical= 2

It was...okay. I'm not going to give it nearly as bad a review as everyone else has, mainly for the fact that I liked the BE. When i'm looking for BE stories, I'm mainly just interested in the growth itself, I rarely ever pay attention to the actual story. Don't worry, I read your entire story since it wasn't too long. It wasn't the best, but It wasn't too bad considering th growth was decent.


Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 3

I enjoyed the fantasy behind the story but, yes, the narrative was all too short. I hope the author will write more - I'd like further glimpse into his fantasies.................

Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 3

I liked it, short and fun. Don't take it too hard what these guys are saying, keep writing bro!

Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1

The 'Saw' series was already used by user SkeetSkeet for two amazing BE stories. Try something new sometime, and better grammar please.

Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1

Terrible. Too short, no real description no real story. Nothing to it.

Bob Dobbs
Overall= 2, BE= 2, Characters= 1, Technical= 1

Atrocious spelling. Might as well have written "Guy wakes up in a room with a girl. Her boobs got huge. The end."

Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1

what a terrible story. you need to be banned from typing on keyboards, and using pencils in conjunction with paper.

Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1

I really hate giving negative reviews and commentary.. But this sorta deserves a bit of a "hey! *slap* No!"

When the story description has a grammatical error like "fassion", I do not go into the actual writing expecting shakespeare. Your enthusiasm for the genre is noted and appreciated, but your total lack of proofreading, spellchecking, description, and the abrupt length of the story itself are all sub-par. This is a few paragraphs of garbled fluff, with no context character devlopment or even substance. Combined with the abysmal writing.. it's not something I can give any praise to.

I sincerely hope that you choose to keep writing, but I hope that your next effort includes proofreading as well as a more lengthy and determined effort. Remember that description is key, and that characters ought to be defined as well as "fleshed out" (pun used intentionally).

Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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