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A new hair stylist writes on his days at work. His first customer comes in after having cut gum out of her hair. She leaves with a little more than just a new hairstyle.
Revision written in 3rd person. Much better read!
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.50
- BE: 3.50
- Characters: 4.00
- Technical: 3.00
Tokatak
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 3
I love stories like these that get you thinking, it was truly a great one!
Horseradish
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 3
Good premise, likable characters. Quite a few spelling errors.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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