The Overflowing Bra

Steve and Malou - Hi Matt,Fantastic website, we have also been lonokig forward to it as well. Now we can show it off to potential clients! Amazing photographs and web design.Steve and Malou

Your style is incredibly rich, like a dark chocolate souffle or mousse, but like the fluffy desserts, lacking in the substance that most readers are looking for. It is clear that you have a solid grasp on the english language and its inner workings, however, not many readers will find the act of playing the piano sexy. Or at least reading about it...
Anywho, don't get discouraged by the comments below, but your story is pretty much all fluff without any substance. Writing to write is one thing, I do it all the time, but when you post something lacking in that particular substance that defines this site, expect less than stellar scores. 
Ramp back your purple prose: only english majors enjoy reading the scarlet letter. Everyone else is looking for something a little bit less flowery and a bit more meaty. 
Bottom line: redirect your literary efforts to describe the character, the plot, or the expansion. 

Geeze, these other comments are mean.  I liked your story.  A site like this has room for all forms of expression (breast expansion related, anyway), and I thought this was a cute little musing.  People, you don't pay for this, so the authors don't have to pander to you.  Of course the author matters!

Short, very choppy, and undescriptive, both of the character and the expansion. That said, it is kind of poetic, and your writing skill is impressive. I only wish it were longer and more descriptive. Overall, A nice little read, but nothing special

Just remember, you may think you are god's gift to readers everywhere, but you are a terrible writer if nobody enjoys what you wrote.  It doesn't matter how good you might be, or how amazing your story is to you.  You don't matter.  It's the reader that matters. 
Ultimately, if your message is not heard, you have failed.
You should rewrite this.  Write a STORY this time.  Not a passage that is meant to "impress".  Write a story anyone can get into and then you'll impress us.

Too obscure for me. Buried under metaphors.

Entirely too short, pointlessly wordy and pompous. Seriously, this isn't Nabokovian literary porn or just plain porn to begin with. It's trite garbage peppered with a holier than thou bitch slap for good measure.

Very short, and didn't catch my imagination at all...

Needs to be longer.