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The Overflowing Bra

Being Jeweled
Jeanette plays a quick game online to pass some time. Who says that gaming isn't good for your figure?

A Short story that was posted over at MC Archive. I thought it was worthy of the repost here, and the author gave permission to do so. 

Average Scores:

Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 1

you fail on the file format. it looks like you took the file and gave it a different extension. it looks more like a openoffice file than an MS word doc. so on that part you fail for the extra work on figuring out wtf kinda file it was.

Otherwise, not too shabby.

Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 4

A good short story, entertaining and playful.

Very Free
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 4

Good short story, but could have used a bit more BE. Would've been nice to be told ahead of time that it was another MasterPC story. I'd guess that there's always room for another Magic/SciFi story here, since it helps get past all the questions that might arise. After all, most adult entertainment doesn't have much of a plot.

Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

I like the original story line, and how you put some up to date real life computer usage in there.

I felt the BE description was missing. I also found myself re reading to see if I missed something. The part about the kimpy underwire bra most notably. I liked the description, but was she wearing it aall along or was that from the game too?

Overall a pretty good story though. Keep it up!

Ninja In The Night
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1

I cannot honestly rate this as I too am unable to read it with Open Office. If you could repost it in possibly Rich Text Format or Text Format or HTML Format, someway that is universally accepted.

Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 3

repost it in a .txt or something, cannot read the story.

Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 3

I cant read it. It comes up encrypted.

Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 3

What's the MC archive?

Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 4

Just wanted to drop a note in that this is not my story, but I certainly found it to be one of my favorite short transformation stories of the last year.

Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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