The Farfalla family has a ritual: when the women of the family turn 18, they get boob jobs. This is the story of Roxy Farfalla and her first boob job.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 3.55
- BE: 2.82
- Characters: 3.18
- Technical: 3.45
H_I_M
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
Love the idea of an implants longing young girl. Like it that you're not just going for big, but also fake looking tits. Would have been nice, if her first guy played a while with her big melons. Hope we get a sequel!
Melons
Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
I really loved the concept of the story and would love to see more chapters. I agree that some of the measurements not to fit together and I too was surprised to see references to Dolly and Pamela when a big tit porn star would have fit the story much better.
I am happy that someone finally is using implants as the means of BE again since this is the only really realistic option so far. However to use its full potential the sizes and measurements should be possible in real life. The reader should think - well it could actually be true that such a family existed.
Thank you for this story and please keep at it.
Merry X-mass and happy New Year.
maybeenuf4u
Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
I really liked the story. Maybe could have used a little more description of the BE, maybe operating room, pumping silicone. Everything else was perfect though.
OM NOM NOM
Overall= 4, BE= 2, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
Would've preferred a longer story, but it's good.
deux_anges
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
The plots works fine for me, after all it is fantasy and you state the themes clearly in your disclaimer.
My complaint is that the story ends too abruptly and there is insufficient BE. The amount present here would have been fine if the story was longer and there were more scenes later but this is not the case.
Maybe with a second chapter it might read better as a whole.
deus
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 2, Technical= 4
I liked the story, but it was too short. Also, the measurements on Dolly Parton and Pamela Anderson are way off and referencing them doesn't really seem to fit the story. Maybe pick pornstars instead?
The Curator
Overall= 2, BE= 2, Characters= 1, Technical= 2
Overall I was weirded out by this, especially halfway throught the first page when it became apparent it was going to be an insest thing. I don't know I'm not big on whore-gies or incest, so maybe I'm being to hastey
dranon
Overall= 1, BE= 2, Characters= 2, Technical= 3
Not my cup of tea. Found it creepy. Solid enough technically though, if jumpy.
Critical Factor
Overall= 3, BE= 2, Characters= 2, Technical= 2
Decent writing style. Using CC as his name when you reference bust sizes in every other sentence was very distracting, should've just called him Horse. Also 19 inch waist with a 44 inch bustline is absurd, I know its a story and its fantasy but when i read that i see a 12 yr old waist with a 300lb fat lady chest, learn your measurements, realism = good.
Not bad for your 2nd story, keep up the progress and you'll get there eventually.
cobra
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 3
Excilent story love it all but was disapointed that it ended so soon, would love for more.
Don Corleone
Overall= 3, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 3
I like the boob jobs, but you should've spent more time on them. And it seems like there should be more story, but what's here is pretty enjoyable.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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