Still tweaking her nipples she replies huskily, “So basically while I was with him, every time I climaxed, my tits grew? What’s the life cycle of the new bacteria?”
Average Scores:
- Overall: 3.90
- BE: 3.40
- Characters: 3.40
- Technical: 3.60
Pat Robertson
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1
The only thing worse than the spelling and grammar was the story itself. Congratulations, you've solo summited Suck Peak.
deus
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
The grammar and spelling could use some clean-up. I noticed you spelled "anatomically" correct in the pdf but not in the post. I hope there is a sequel to this one coming. :)
tstar
Overall= 4, BE= 2, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
not enough be.could have used more description.(size, how they looked)
Double S B
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 2
I am shocked that nobody pointed out that its "anatomically." I never really got over that. I didn't care for the pictures, the plot, or this story in general. That being said, I hope my comments don't discourage you from a second attempt.
Anonymous
Overall= 3, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
I'm not sold on the use of such explicit images. I know the *content* is explicit, but I just don't enjoy looking at massive photoshopped cocks while I'm reading erotica.
Greaper
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
i'm having issues downloading it. it says that the file is damaged. Any suggestions? until i read i will rate what the average already is.
Anonymous
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Amazing story, just the kind i look for keep it up
Starman973
Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
realize the first chapter was the first time I ever wrote, as you can see I got better as I kept going. Chapter 4 has already started, but since I must have BE with each installment, I might have to go to Chapter 6 to have more BE.
G-man001
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Dear Lord! This was fun! Loved the pics! The story idea! The organization! Please don't be a one hit wonder! My only complaint is the the use of pronouns. The 'he' and 'him's at the beginning were distracting, as was much of the male dialogue..who's the patient, the doctor, etc. But I love the format and would definitely read more? Maybe bigger next time? Preg? A guy can hope.
maybeenuf4u
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
I really like that you: put the story in pdf format, and that you thought enough to include pictures. Good original story line too. I just don't like how the story ends.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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