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The Overflowing Bra

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This is the first time I've written a story focusing on a breast expansion theme, and was done at the request of a fan of my more normal works. Please don't be too harsh, and I would really appreciate any pointers and advice.
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Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 3

Very nice. Do I smell a sequel in the works?

Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 4

It was a good little story... And no, you don't have to change the age. I'm fairly certain we're all aware teen girls masturbate and this is a fetish site so people don't judge other fetishes! Don't change a thing, I approve!

Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 1, Technical= 3

that was adequate, 2 things:

2. .txt can be a bit of a problematic format, consider using .rtf or .html instead.

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