The Definitive BE Story Archive

The Overflowing Bra

Cristina Prince
Poren Springs
Kristen, a self-assured, independent woman, has trouble owning up to her increasing addiction to Cherub Cream and Cherub Crunch beauty snacks.
Average Scores:

Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 4

I didn't enjoy this one as much as the first two. It took a couple reads before I understood what was happening (granted I read it once before I had read either of the others). The BE seemed really subtle as well.

Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 4

For all confusion read the author's previous works. This is a continuing universe story. That being said. Very awesome. The hot lazy heat that runs throughout the story is top notch and the growth, while slow, is done in a superlative fashion. Now if only someone would have been knocked up!

Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 4

I don't think this story is perfect by any means, but it's not as horrible as some have said either. Could have used more work in the subway scene

Overall= 1, BE= 2, Characters= 2, Technical= 3

I am confused. That's not a good way to be, after reading something that should be cohesive. Didn't really enjoy at all, only reason I kept reading to the end was in the (apparently vain) hope of getting some explanation as to what's going on here. A "here's how it all started" paragraph could have gone a LONG way to putting things together.

Overall= 2, BE= 2, Characters= 3, Technical= 2

I'm sorry, I really couldn't follow this story at all. In many ways well done but painful to read. BE description was substandard.

Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 3

I found the writing style hard to follow. Other than that it was good.

Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4

I thought this was a good story except for a few issues...

You have an odd random double spacing between words sprinkled throughout the story.
They guy tries to rescue her, but then just kicks her out?
She's been acting like a nympho, but didn't have any sex and when it comes up she rejects it?
I'm still confused by the ending. Seems cut short.

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