Bill's Date gradually becomes a horny big titted bimbo.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.67
- BE: 4.44
- Characters: 4.67
- Technical: 4.22
Maser-Brain
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
I'm beginning to think you are the king of bimbofication. The gradual changes, wardrobe changes, Billy's awareness of Michelle's changes, the cameo of Jewels, and the overal pace was just spot-on.
Would be fun if one time the girl being transformed were aware they were being transformed, i.e. all the physical and wardrobe changes happen first, followed by a short period where she tries to convince others there's something amiss to no avail, and then her mind begins to slip.
hurdur
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
Awesome story, very good spacing in my opinion, only a few spots of gramatical error, and yet the one real thing that kinda brought it down a tad was at the end, it seemed to just drop off. Kinda wanted to see just how all of Missy's changes would be used in action ;D but great story nonetheless!
Savagecabbage
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
Really Good Story - but this is one of those cases where I would have loved the changes to be even slower, adding more anticipation -it seemed to be over far too quick for me:)
ScramblerJ
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
I really enjoyed this tale. It was a nice touch to see Jewels return as guest star and I hope you keep that theme running with each new tale you write.
The way she slowly changed and the detail you put into her changes as well as the fun by-play between everyone was great. Her taking him home was funny and sexy. Missy like Jewels is a KEEPER!
-j-
Beachball Boobs
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Lets see some more! I really liked it!
Fahzbehn
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
I was truly impressed. I do find it interesting that he's the only one who noticed the change and, I think, it might have been more interesting if she noticed as well and couldn't convince anyone... which I may just have as a story myself.
Zero Zyzzyx
Overall= 3, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 2
It's a good start, but it feels a little formulaic. The process was good, but the dialogue could use some work.
zinrai
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
I've got to echo PyroWildcat, you did a wonderful job with the gradual changes, some authors jump the gun on gradual changes and make too much happen at once, but you did a wonderful job of keeping it gradual. I only spotted an error or two, and I enjoyed the story overall. Keep up the great work.
PyroWildcat
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Very nice stuff here; the gradual transformation was portrayed very well, and the descriptions were excellent.
The scene with Missy's father was kind of an interesting touch as well.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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