My first work of erotic fiction, so any feedback is highly welcome. This is just a story of a girl who starts growing for no apparent reason, then she calls up a friend and fun ensues.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.00
- BE: 3.89
- Characters: 3.67
- Technical: 4.11
anon
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 2, Technical= 3
should have been more descriptive.
Kiri
Overall= 3, BE= 2, Characters= 1, Technical= 4
harl
Overall= 4, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
Nice one, swift but complete.
Gorp Thorp
Overall= 3, BE= 2, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
It's nice to see a story that set over time that's long enough not to be instant but short enough that it doesn't take days to get through the process.
AGunit360
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Pics, i would love to see some pics. I loved the story so descriptive
Kam
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Great story, especially since its your first peice. May i suggest focusing on a little more of the growth and less of the " they were all of the sudden" growth?
other than that, no major qualms ^_^
Baconman
Overall= 4, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Nice story, but please consider changing the ages.
Genoharden
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
A clever dalliance into the world of BE! Great descriptions and grammar! My hero!
idontknow
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 3
Loved it! keep them coming!
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
Due to comment spam, any new posts with http in them will be destroyed.
