The Definitive BE Story Archive

The Overflowing Bra

naughtychaswick
naughtychaswick@gmail.com
American Pasttime
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 Mary
Overall= 3, BE= 1, Characters= 3, Technical= 2 
Not even GOOD baseball talk. A-Rod hitting in front of the pitcher's spot? Yankees struggling to beat the Mets? Come on!
 Biantai
Overall= 2, BE= 1, Characters= 3, Technical= 5 
In the future, please tell us that the girl has a boy's chest that does not grow at all.
 bitchesdawn
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 5 
That was horrible.  No BE, nothing but baseball talk.
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