This is a story I wrote because I enjoy writing. Alexandra finds out what her boyfriends fetishes are all about and decides they could enjoy some of them together. What starts out as something just for fun turns into something else entirely.
The story is told from Alexandra's point of view, so expect a slightly different feel by having the female 1st person story telling. I hope you enjoy!
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.38
- BE: 3.75
- Characters: 3.63
- Technical: 3.75
fisher
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
nice idea. the story definitley has potential if there was just more background information. also, the 'journal' feel to it doesn't seem as engaging as i'd like it to be.
G-man001
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
I liked the concept, idea and execution of this story. Could have been a little 'sexier.' But a very good effort. Liked the narrator's voice and the arch of the story. Well done, write more!
Red
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
Excellent! Really good, can't wait to see you write more, but REALLY hope to see this story continued. THIS reader DOES like to see unrelenting growth, and to see it from Alexandra's perspective. Truly good, thanks again.
FARTBOX
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Oh wow, this was a nice surprise. Very well written.
Mr. Justaguy
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 2, Technical= 3
I liked this story a lot. My only criticism would be that the characters felt like they were in a bit of a void. We hear about the roommate but no-one else. we see very little of the pair's day-to-day lives. It might be fun to see other people's reactions to her growth. None the less a great piece, thanks for sharing it!
Hadithia
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 3
Always interesting to read from the female point of view. Overall solid story.
TheNewNo2
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
I liked it generally, though I thought it somewhat got away towards the end. I guess I don't much like the mind control aspects and unrelenting growth. Still, well written.
Chuu
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
This was really good. It only needed some light polishing, writing-wise.
Please keep writing, I don't want to wait another two years for your next story.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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