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Aaron is chosen to beta test a new kind of music player that stores data in his bodily tissue. Things go awry when some corrupted files make it into the system and change his life forever.
My very first attempt at a story. It's definitely not Pulitzer material and I'm aware of that, so be kind.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 5.00
- BE: 5.00
- Characters: 4.33
- Technical: 4.33
TheEarl
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Very fun story and still holds up after many years. A few clunky bits on characterisation, but it's generally well written, the description of the transformation is topdrawer, and it's a very hot idea. Hopefully your first bit of feedback in 16 years brings a smile to your face!
The Earl
Chris
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
This was a fantastic original. The transformation was very creative. I want an Ibod!
TwiTwi
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Cool idea for the plot, great implementation. :)
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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