An experimental drug trial goes awry as Jake discovers that the drug has some unintended side effects - on not only him, but the girls he sleeps with! (WARNING: also contains weight gain)
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.33
- BE: 4.17
- Characters: 4.00
- Technical: 4.67
Very Free
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
Good story, easy read, flowed well. A few mistakes but technically very good. Nice to have an epilog at the end but I was kind of disappointed to find that the sci guy didn't come through with anything on the analysis. After all, I'm sure we would all like to get some of those pills!!
Beetlebomb
Overall= 3, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 5
I really like your writing style, but I just couldn't get past the weight gain. I know it's a matter of a persons taste, but I just couldn't focus on the story as well as I could have when I was picturing an extremely overweight girl in my head.
Although, your stories great, and I'm glad there's something there for everyone.
Looking forward to possibly seeing a non-weight gain story from you! ^^
Blamandude
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
I smiled and cheered when I saw you had uploaded not one but two stories. You are really good at including tons of growth and other goodies without going too over the top (for me at least)while still managing to have good interesting characters.
RoidAbuser
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
I enjoyed this, even though not into fatties. Wish he nailed Katie a bit more!
G-man001
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Enjoyable, though the weight gain stuff is fun and different, maybe a little too much (especially too much if you aren't going to describe what it is like to screw these big girls!) Maybe try some preggo in a future story? Or is it not flabby enough for ya? ;) Keep up the good work turning in product that is worth reading time and time again. Also nice to see GTS get a shout out...now make her break some ceilings!
Genoharden
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
Wonderful! I loved the weightgain aspect! Logically, it makes more sense as well... Fantastic! You're becoming one of my favorite writers here! :D
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