Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.33
- BE: 4.17
- Characters: 4.17
- Technical: 4.00
Very Free
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Eeep! Good story! I think it would add to the mouse's personality if she had a name.
Nikky
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
G-man001
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 3
This was new and original! Love the growth descriptions, very real, funny, and just a little hot. Keep up the good work, you've got talent.
Mr. Justaguy
Overall= 4, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Wow. That was realy enjoyable. Not enough good storys about short, curvy BE and more importantly the story was very well paced I sat and read it in one sitting without getting bored or skipping yet it was still long enough to have a well developed protaganist. Thanks!
I Think
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
I agree. Very unique and quite enjoyable! I like how you developed Mouse's character, but that seemed to dwindle as the story progressed; perhaps a bit more characterization there would be nice.
As I tend to say (probably too often) to people, it would help to proofread or have someone else proofread your story to catch the little quirks that appear; they're nigh-unavoidable, and if they were fixed, your story would be that much more appealing.
Keep up the good work!
Sneakpeeker
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
Well done! Starts slow (and somewhat odd - good!), and had me wondering where you were going with this until it caught momentum. It's a very unique idea for sure and well executed in your writing.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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