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Furry Warning! A young fox buys a female cow anthro and accidentally gives her some bovine growth hormone! Whoops! How big will she get?
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.14
- BE: 3.71
- Characters: 3.71
- Technical: 3.14
Drakin
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 3
A very lovely story, as others have pointed out the structure and grammatical errors were a bit annoying, but they were not noticeable if one really got into the story like I tried to. Other than that my only complaint was there was quite a bit of build up before the fun began. And while this in itself is not bad by any means, it does make the story feel a little lopsided. It's perfect if this were the start of a series, but for a stand alone it just feels like a lot of buildup for a 'not quite as substantial' payoff.
Still, for what it is and not what it might be, it's a good story and worth a read for any dedicated furry fan (like myself).
S-Shadow
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
A story I can enjoy fully, being a furry myself. Great work, I'd love to read more. ^^
Very Free
Overall= 2, BE= 2, Characters= 1, Technical= 2
Beside the poor paragraph structuring mentioned above, there were almost a hundred errors, many of them mixed tenses in the same sentence. But what I found more confusing were the many conflicts, limiting one in forming a mental image of the character. Does she have udders or tits, or both? Four udders? At one point she had hands? Or like how can you fit sideways between two cars if she's a fucking cow?
I'm not trying to discourage the author from writing an otherwise entertaining story, but it needs a *lot* of work to get the lumps and bumps out so it's a decent read.
The other other guy
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Nice work. I really enjoyed this story and while details seemed to get a little confusing near the end it was still quite enjoyabe.
Etherealvision
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
I really enjoyed this story. I hope to see more ^^
ninjaman
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 3
Fantastic story, first of all; good to see you active again. Sentence-wise, there were several things that could be done better. For example, during the sex scene when you describe Miiky's juices flowing down Roxas's cock, you could combine "He almost came just from how hot she apparently was. Her juices dripping down his dick." into "He almost came just from feeling how hot she was; her juices were even dripping down his dick." is one way to improve it. One last thing is the detail. Now, I love detail as much as the next man, but you were a little heavy on it- for me, it bogged down the story because you went into so much depth. Keep up the good work!
fahzbehn
Overall= 3, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 2
Bad paragraph structuring for the monologue.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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