The Definitive BE Story Archive

The Overflowing Bra

Fahzbehn
fahzbehn@yahoo.com
Happy Birthday Nikki
Samantha gets her boyfriend a special set of birthday presents which slowly turn Nicholas into a buxom, submissive Nikki.
Average Scores:

Sucker4Boobs
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 4

Not bad. Can't wait for the next - and hopefully, longer - sequel.

p
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

The only problem that came up over and over was your use of the word "to" instead of "too." If something is in excess, we use the word "too." Such as, my explanation of your grammar was too long, instead I should be telling people how much I liked it.

It's short, too the point, and worth reading no doubt.

joce37
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

I enjoyed this very much - especially when he so re-occupied that he hadn't noticed his tits had grown so big. Yes we need a sequel - please.

anony123
Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

wow fantastic TG story with a little bit more elaboration on the transformation details(i.e. feelings from the main characters perspective)you could make a great sequel or simliarly themed story.

Duuude
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Longer! Great!!!

Do another one! Maybe a little hesitency/unsure-of-himself on his part would be a good touch.

dranon
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 5

Really great, though I almost wish it had been at least partly NC. I agree it was much too short though, and some more detail w/ the BE would've been nice as well.

daninja
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 5

this was a great story! i would love to read a 2nd like this. i agree that it was too short

godofwar5000
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 3

Really enjoy TG stories, especially BE ones. I really enjoyed it, but i think you could have dragged it out more and added more into it. It all occurred too quickly. But definitely enjoyable, I look forward to more.

Genoharden
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 4

It's hard to find a good TG story ever since fictionmania went under... I'm glad the genre is still alive!

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