gettinbigger123@googlemail.com
This is my second story ever. So if you like balloons inflating boobs give it a peep send your thoughts to gettinbigger123@googlemail.com
Average Scores:
- Overall: 2.60
- BE: 3.00
- Characters: 2.40
- Technical: 2.20
Lily
Overall= 2, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
You've hit the ball out the park! Incerdible!
Dreginy
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
I really liked it. i'm not all that picky though haha, all i look for in stories is huge breast expansion, and this story's got it. good job.
HeliumGirl
Overall= 3, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 2
Nice enough story. A little rushed. Could have used a TINY bit more backstory.
I happen to like gaseous inflation BE, so I give this a 4, but even though this one is properly rated with a "wow" I think the sizes here are portrayed unrealistically. Who has a balcony big enough to handle two women with boobs over 100ft in diameter?
The characters don't have much personality, and their descriptions are rather limited too, but at least there is some.
Next time, save it in a more universal format. Fortunately I happen to have a copy of Works here, but Word .doc is much more common.
An O. Nymous
Overall= 2, BE= 2, Characters= 2, Technical= 1
WPS - Microsoft Works. Recommended for better outreach: .doc, .rtf, .txt or .htm
Now this might be because of the converter I ran this through, but you really need to work on the formatting - commas, quotation marks, indentation, paragraphs, line breaks seemed pretty messed up to me. I'd suggest that next time, you take a break and re-read it before you put it online. On the whole, it's rather hurried, frantic and "cartoony", both in the description and the presentation.
bugg
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1
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