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The Overflowing Bra

Paul Gerard
Yrba’s Travels Pt. 3 – Tubs, Sponges and Soaking (World of Altaerna, 1200)
Mirca, quite possibly the shyest of blond 6'6 Amazon lookalikes, is about to receive a lesson about the joys of personal hygiene. And her mistresses, the five harlots of Madame Red’s bathing house, are about to get an unexpected up-close look (and taste) of their new pupil’s mammaries’ quirks. Later, Yrba decides to do some hands-on research with her muscle-bound plaything, ends up out cold again and finally gets into a breast-off with Red’s new poster strumpet Charlene. But how can a magic-immune witch even hope to compete...?
ZIP file contains the previous parts, too. Comments welcome, as always.
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Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

That bath part was GREAT! Good work!

I Think
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Quite entertaining! I like how it's not centered on BE, per se, but it has enough to be in here, yet it is quite a piece of writing. A bit too sex-oriented to be a normal short story, but it has all the qualities I'd look for in a story. Great!

Ninja In The Night
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Jeez, your writing style blows me away. It's not only entertaining to read, but it's imaginative. Every chapter just keeps spitting images of the story into my head. Your descriptions are keen, and your character development is out there. Lol, the witch being my first favorite, closely followed by the girl she travels with.

elvis interuptus
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 4

Still fun, keep going.

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