qwizzicalbe@yahoo.com
This story took over two years to write, and it is as epic in scale as the time it took to write it. The author sincerely hopes you will enjoy the story in the spirit it was written.
Part fanfic, part superhero tale, and just the right amount of BE, this story redefines the superhero genre by taking seven BE-capable superheroes and asking the question: "What would you do with the power to cause breast expansion?"
Jennifer Love Hewitt, my favorite actress of all time, makes a cameo, of course.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 1.29
- BE: 1.14
- Characters: 1.00
- Technical: 1.29
Toymaker
Overall= 2, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 2
Fanfiction is a sticky wicket at best, and fanfiction that seems to draw heavily on inside jokes stickier still. I made it up to the part where the reporter uses the serum on herself to interrogate the lab tech, but really, I was skimming at that point.
The story seems a little contrived, the writing is not that strong (His eyes were *infected* with breast milk?) and from reading the other reviews here, it appears that this is more of a drawn-out jab at the people you're basing your characters off of.
It might have been funnier if you'd gone the extra mile and made up pseudonyms for the pseudonyms, instead of for the DC references. I gave it a 2 for enjoyment, because I kind of liked it at first, but kept waiting to "get it," and never did. I'm not that much of a forum-goer to get what you were trying to say, which is (part of) why this story fails for me.
Better luck next time.
The Internet
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1
I barely got past the first paragraph before I didn't want to read any more. I had no idea Q-BE did not have persmission to use the names that are included in this story, but given my past dealings with him on the forum, I am not surprised at the pure intellectual laziness displayed here. Also, sound effects in stories are annoying and make it difficult to read. This was a waste of two years.
foxdrifter
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1
I'm going to have to rate this all ones as well. Story content aside, there is no excuse to use names and likenesses of others without their express permission. While I'm sure it was well-intended, perhaps as a tribute, it is wrong nonetheless.
I'm normally put off by the inclusion of celebrities in stories, but to use non-public figures and potentially tarnish their reputation and identity by misrepresenting them is just low.
Anon
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1
I think your bad story just gave me cancer. Maybe you should've waited one more year.
ugh ugh
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1
Greener21
Overall= 2, BE= 2, Characters= 1, Technical= 2
I have no idea whether the other commenter is correct about the history here. I just think the story is ameteurish and boring. If this took two years, you need to find a more productive use of your time.
Rachel-O
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1
What Q-BE has done, by using usernames and posts by real forumites in his story despite their repeated requests that he not do so, is both obscenely disrespectful and creepy.
While they may not be our real names, our usernames are who we identify as and who we're known to others as online and within this community. We are all real people. Were we not, Q-BE wouldn't have our posts and histories to refer to in his story. His lack of respect for our wishes not to be used by him is overwhelming.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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