Suzanna tries to stay awake by sampling an energy drink from a stranger selling them from the back of his van. An adage story contest entry at the mcforum. Feedback appreciated.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 3.25
- BE: 2.00
- Characters: 3.75
- Technical: 5.00
Anon
Overall= 3, BE= 2, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
Very nice start, but needs to have more to it after the initial coupling. Perhaps a sequal is in the works? Hopes....
very free
Overall= 3, BE= 1, Characters= 3, Technical= 5
Not much BE, otherwise good.
Anonymous
Overall= 3, BE= 2, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
Clever. Pity I don't enjoy Bimboization, but points for cleverness. Not a great focus on breasts, but the pregnancy talk was a nice touch.
HubbleOverTaiwan
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
Good start to a story, the mental transformation appeared to be the driving factor, which is nice. Also, way to end with a pun :)
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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