A girl having problems with her boyfriend becomes a big-titted, sex-obsessed slut.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 2.78
- BE: 3.00
- Characters: 2.44
- Technical: 2.89
Above Ground Pool Prices
Overall= 2, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 3
The topic is pretty complicated for a beginner!...
The Archivist
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
There is not enough bimboization out there. Excellent work.
maybeenuf4u
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Love it. Its MY fantasy too.
Beezelbub
Overall= 2, BE= 2, Characters= 1, Technical= 1
Sucker4Boobs
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
The spelling was bad, but it's a good start. I'd advise you to check out other stories on this site for inspiration.
The Doob
Overall= 2, BE= 2, Characters= 1, Technical= 2
First off, thank you for at least contributing something to the site and the genre. However I cannot really give this a very good rating.. The characters are largely unappealing and one-dimensional. The execution of the "fantasy" which is the whole reason people read stories on this website was rushed, and generally crap. It seems like you wrote this story more for your own (ahem) "amusement" and then decided to post it. I encourage you to keep writing, but next time maybe spend more than one night doing it.. and always ALWAYS keep in mind the audiance here. The execution of the proposed fantasy whould always be at least equal to it's setup.
RapierStab
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 2, Technical= 4
Far from the best, but quite far from the worst as well. Characters are rather one dimensional, but the overall story is interesting, if nothing else.
Lord Vader
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1
BenAdams1980
Overall= 2, BE= 3, Characters= 2, Technical= 4
Fairly well-written.
Too bad both characters were wholly unlikeable.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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