A re-interpretation of the classic tale.
This is my first submission to the BE community, which has taught me quite a bit about writing.
Comments welcome!
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.33
- BE: 4.00
- Characters: 4.75
- Technical: 4.75
Heni
Overall= 3, BE= 5, Characters= 2, Technical= 3
Wow, this is in every reecpst what I needed to know.
Mr.Subtle
Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Very well written story, with a wonderful plot and lots (and lots and lots of sex). BE or transformations in general take a bit of a back stage, but any more would probably have detracted from the storyline.
Excellent style that really did wonders to put the story inside a foggy 19th century London.
Oxriff
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
especially loved the characters, the writing and the mental transformation, hope you write more in the future.
CitizenPower
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Amazing! Great story, excellent detail. Too often one or more aspects of the story get left by the wayside, but not here. I look forward with anticipation for more of the same!
G-man001
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Very well done. The transformation by the characters was described with thought and awesome prose. The ending left me a little disappointed, but the best part was...I cared. I actually cared about the story, not just puppets to transform. A great story, please post more.
The Doob
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
I find myself without criticism here.. only encouragement. Your writing style is superb, your story structure and character development is fantastic, and your technical and grammatical proficiancy is a breath of fresh air. It's quite refreshing to read something on overflowingbra that is actually worth READING. I look forward to future work from you, and I would actually encourage you to take up writing as a pursuit for non-erotica as well.. you seem quite suited to it.
Oh-Sai
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
Outstanding first submission, bahamad. You found a great balance between storytelling and erotica in this story. I liked how the characters developed, allowing for some sympathy (and connection) to the various characters introduced. I look forward to further submissions (including a continuation of this) from you. Keep up the excellent work!
OM NOM NOM
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
ButtsMcGee
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
I adore your writing style. Please write more.
Roid Abuser
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
I really like the mutual body modification. From a technical persepctive, you did a great job with accents and "period" language (with the exception of a certain "salami" reference --- seemed jarring). Very Victorian, and simply a good story, above and beyond the salacious aspects.
Pobblebonk
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Some of the more violent parts had me cringing but otherwise a very good read. A good adaptation of the classic.
Genoharden
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
I'm not much for bestiality, but this was a fantastically written story! Bravo!
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