A story of betrayal, delusion, and forgiveness. BE starts at section 5, if you are willng to skip the exposition. If you find any spelling errors, hooray, you beat Microsoft Word.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 3.00
- BE: 3.50
- Characters: 4.25
- Technical: 4.75
dagger
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
This stuff's really deep. The writing style is truly invigorating, yet it's a little to deep for my tastes. Not the easiest of reads.
G-man001
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
A very awesome BE scene, but I must echo the comments as to the confusion of the actual plot. Who's dead? When? Does the beginning and the end dovetail, etc...but a very nice read.
Paul Gerard
Overall= 2, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
This one’s difficult to rate. I have found it not so much enjoyable as I found it challenging, albeit in a good way (but then, how do you rate this?). It has great, vivid descriptions and plays out like something straight out of the Twilight Zone, including the twist at the end. Definitely NOT the usual j.o. material.
Merkava IV
Overall= 3, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
This story is very well written with verbose and flowery speech. Exceptional vocabulary and description asside, I didn't enjoy it that much. While there was BE, and certainly some steam to it, it seemed... cold. Indeed (and maybe I missed something here) the ending didn't make a whole lot of sense to me. Was Dora dead from the start, and Max an intermediary, or did she die later off stage? I am a firm believer that there can be BE in a mainstream story, which is well written and not sex-centric, but this story seemed kinda, well... bitter sweet, and a downer.
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