Ok, you're probably getting pretty fed up of me by now. This is the last try to get this working. Hopefully the mods will delete the last two attempts.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 3.83
- BE: 3.83
- Characters: 3.83
- Technical: 4.00
Boobarian
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Joe Monday
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
I like the concept of the story and the whole turnabout aspect. I might have liked for Denise to take even more pleasure out of her transformation and really gone after Carly in her new state -- But that's just me! ; )
G-man001
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 3
I liked the story. Short and simple, without being a tease of one unfinished chapter. Sure, a few grammer mistakes appear, but it is still readable. Keep up the good work! Your next one will probably be even better!
A Nonny Mouse
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
A little rough around the edges, but I quite liked it. No massive grammatical gaffes, I have to say that commas are the least of the worries usually. I'm not sure what I can offer in terms of how to improve, it just seemed to lack polish overall.
Very Free
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
Several missing or misplaced commas. I didn't get much of a satisfied feeling after reading this, I guess because it seems that there is something lacking at the end.
MrHHH
Overall= 3, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Whoops. Forgot to copy the old description.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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