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The Overflowing Bra

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Stacy's Old Wives Tale
Puberty passed over Stacy and it has left her depressed. however an old wives tale has kept her hopes up that her dreams can come true. But will they? Steven is in love with Stacy but he doesn't think she even knows who he is. When the planets align something special is in the air.
Average Scores:

Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 1

I enjoyed the story a lot, although it could really use a good looking over. There are many typos and basic mistakes. Those kinds of mistakes usually completely turn me off but I read through to the end so kudos! This story has potential.
Small technical detail: way too much inflation for so little BE. I love the inflation but I'm puzzled as to how 10 gallons of cum created c cup breasts; it seems very off balance. Also disappointed that there was no lactation. I want to see the continuation! Or even a re-work of this story would be cool!

Colonel Flagg
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1

I might be permanently turned off.

Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 1, Technical= 2

Just thought I'd point this out, but you have no idea what an Old Wive's Tale actually is, do you?

Overall= 2, BE= 3, Characters= 1, Technical= 1

This was very rushed. No one acts like Stacy did. Details were too convenient.

Everything needs more depth

Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 5, Technical= 3

Seems a bit rushed and the BE could be described in more detail, especially the boobs... but this story has amazing potential and so do you as a writer.. keep it up... I'm looking forward to the next segment..

Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 3

Good basic idea but the plot seems too rushed, although I appreciate it's quite a fine balance between giving it a bit more depth and not labouring too long on it. A little more background about the characters would be nice. On the plus side, you did use a spellcheck! :)

Overall= 3, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 2

Good concept, but the writing leaves a lot to be desired. You need an editor.

Overall= 3, BE= 1, Characters= 2, Technical= 1

With a good editorial read-over, and more detail put into the BE, this could be a really good story. And some plot depth could be a nice touch, though sometimes a shallow story is good.

Overall= 4, BE= 2, Characters= 3, Technical= 4

nice story but a little fast, but good for a first time

Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 2, Technical= 2

The punctuation is messy, homonyms are messed up, and the plot is shallow. Could use some mystery, confusion, and surprise in the characters.

Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Cant wait for the continuation of this saga.
Very good story line.

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