A story about a boy who was travelling by bus. He met a neighbour woman with a strange but pleasant transformations of her body. Was it magic or reality, who knows?
Average Scores:
- Overall: 2.57
- BE: 2.29
- Characters: 2.14
- Technical: 1.86
Tirithedain
Overall= 2, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1
If the grammar were improved, it would probaly be more readable.
No Speekee Engrish
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1
I've read better Pidgin Engrish Chinese electronics manuals. Do the world a favor and disconnect your mother's computer from the internet.
Kisame17
Overall= 3, BE= 2, Characters= 3, Technical= 2
Was that all a hallucination? Still this story was satisfying, I'm still boggled at how he had sex on the bus without waking anybody.
Bored
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1
Fan
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 3
Although ESL, I thought the structure and flow were magnificent. Grammar and things like "Karl Marks" continually popping up here and there did take away and that's why I rated it a three,
Because your structure and style were so good though it allowed me to give you fives in every other category, AWESOME story, I love your style. More readable than 90% of the stuff on here.
Good job.
Link
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
very nice story pls write more!!! :D
GN
Overall= 2, BE= 2, Characters= 1, Technical= 2
Obviously ESL. Not that ESL is bad, of course, but it is not good English and tends to flow strangely.
Aside from that, very little BE and odd grammar makes it difficult to read.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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