A few proofreader's notes:
a social clique, not click; you can't deny you like big butts, not deign that you like them.
Using Goddess in place of God... well, I'm not here to knock anyone's religion, but whenever this appears in a story, it always sounds forced to me. If the idea of a male God offends, just have your characters say 'goodness,' or, better yet simply avoid the construction altogether.
This is more a complaint about the awkwardness of the furrydom's self-referential language, but excising the words "person" and "someone" and replacing them with "fur" and, uh, "a fur" tweaks me as well. "Someone" isn't even species-specific!
Page 20: "leaned the was" -> "learned there was"?
Page 24: "She rubbed her belly in the hopes of quieting for another hour of sleep." line makes no particular sense in context.
More furrydom annoyances: DAMMIT, CALL IT SEX. "YIFF" is a godawful abomination of a word, be it noun, verb, or *shudder* adjective.
Page 45: missing a "was" near the bottom.
Page 46: "He would have other skills to defender when she finished." -> "He would have other skills to defend her with when she finished."?
Page 47: "Brenda's course the inside of" : "of course"?
Overall, a nice adult fable. The ending was a little weak, in my opinion, but well-executed.
