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John finds a magic ring, and transforms the girl he loves, but can't get. all changes are temporary.
BE, Increased sensitivity, Magic, slow, some mind control
Average Scores:
- Overall: 3.50
- BE: 3.50
- Characters: 3.25
- Technical: 3.75
ineligible
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
I loved the setup and the story, Mark. It could have been longer though! I def see potential.
yire-shalom3000
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
A very good story which i'm waiting for its continuation
banditking
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
I liked the story-line. I,m a sucker for magical ring, and lots of breast growth, but with magic has a darkside. Use the darkside just a little, but don't crazy.
LoveBE
Overall= 2, BE= 2, Characters= 1, Technical= 3
Sorry, but it just didn't really catch my attention. It was an okay story I guess, but the plotline is a little overplayed already in the BE community, plus it was way too short. Also, the interactions were a little robotic and needed personality.
Keep writing though. You'll get better.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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