puffyjones@hotmail.com
My first ever story. Contains Mini-gts, slow-growth. A boy named Jake is secretly in love with a girl named Gen that lives next door. As their relationships grow closer so does their height and extacy for one another. This is just part 1 of many more to come (hopefully if people like it). PLEASE comment on this story whether it's positive or negative. I want to improve on my writing skills so that I may provide the community with great new stories. Thank you and enjoy :)
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.50
- BE: 3.25
- Characters: 4.25
- Technical: 3.25
one_eyed_jack
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 3
First off - I wanted to say thanks for your comments on my story, so out of respect I had to come check your stuff out, of course. The energy and pace of it was great.. the BE descriptions left just enough to my imagination, and overall it was really sexy. I think it just needed a little polish with the grammar and spelling, but it really didn't take that much away. I'm looking forward to part 2!
ZenPaladin
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
The first part of the tale provides some good set up. It seemed a little overlong there to me. But it also lets us have a good grounding of where the characters are coming from before the fun starts.
The button scene at the Sushi place was particularly great. The public nature of it and the rampant eating were prime stuff.
Thanks for taking the time to create and share this with us.
Very Free
Overall= 3, BE= 1, Characters= 3, Technical= 1
Many spelling and punctuation errors that could've been fixed by a spell check (they were uploaded as a .DOC so it should've been written in a word processor with a spell checker).
Dr Know
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
I really enjoy this story! I'm a huge fan of GTS especially of Mini-GTS so this is amzing for me! Just wanted to let you know I love your work, and please keep it up!!
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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