The first of the many adventures of Matt. After gaining a new ability Matt finds he is able to shape women's bodies. His first test is on his friend Amber.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 3.00
- BE: 2.40
- Characters: 2.80
- Technical: 3.00
TW
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
As Merkava said, your story is (regretfully) short and the BE could be better described...
Still I'd very much like to read more, cause the setting is great!
Merkava IV
Overall= 3, BE= 2, Characters= 2, Technical= 3
Don't let the low marks fool you. It's a good start. Your grammar is actually not terrible, as some have said; it's the punctuation that gets you down in the technical quality section. That and a few spelling errors that a spell checker might, or might not catch. The issue I really have is the BE description. It's a mistake I have made before, just using letters in cup sizes to describe size. You have to get descriptive! The overall enjoyment is only low because it was short. Keep working, you have a good thing going, polish, refine, and put out more!
Very Free
Overall= 3, BE= 1, Characters= 3, Technical= 2
Several punctuation and grammar errors, and sentences run together, other sentences just incomplete. I liked the story, but it seemed rushed, maybe because of sentences, or lack of. Keep up the good work, hope to see more chapters soon.
aryanman
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Stainless Steel Rat
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1
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