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Another quick romp about the joys of growth, and the joys of young love.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 5.00
- BE: 4.33
- Characters: 4.50
- Technical: 4.67
Lurking Koishi
Overall= 5, BE= 2, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
Overall Even at only 5 pages in length, this story instantly scores among my favourites with ease.
BE Low score here only because there's no onscreen growth described besides it being mentioned once offhandedly I strongly suggest more actively described growth in part 2.
Characters The characters are extremely wellwritten considering the length or lack of this story has, but I'm DYING to know more about their personalities in the next installment.
Technical Some periodic mild spelling and grammatical errors, but nothing so bad to be a bother.
Last but not least... PLEASE write the continuation of this story, this one as well as a number of your other standalone 'part 1s' has been among the best stories I've read on this site, and I just can't help myself but pray that you one day continue all of your little gems seriously, you write some great content!
Joe
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Amazing Story. I wish there were a part 2.
snake in the grass
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
aryan man
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 3, Technical= 5
gman1
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
I like this one much more and I am very curious where you plan to take this story.
Ineligible
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
I LOVED this story, please, write more! :D
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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