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The Overflowing Bra

Hermione Granger and the Unexpected Arrival
When Hermione Granger finds herself in an awkward position Hogwarts School of Witchcraft and Wizardry gets turned upside down. What will she do and how will her friends react? Read and find out. Illustrated by Kaleigh Blue
Average Scores:

Overall= 3, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Brilliantly written, although I still can't stand R/Hr.

Bob R&H
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Awesome, among the best HP fan fiction I have read. My only prob is you missed the obvious lesbian action between Hermione and Luna, you danced around it so artfully, i thought you were building up the tension, and then... nothing. Otherwise perfect.

Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Extremely well written, kept me entertained. However, I have to say that the Stargate SG-1 reference with "what could possibly be in my eye to explain this" really made it worth it. Nice how that one was slipped in there.Granted, very little BE, but with this kind of quality, I'd say it wasn't missed much

Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

A fine piece of art, your work is top notch. Now before i go on, i realize this is a BE fiction sight and does not cater to the Prego/mother fetish. And ive nothing against this story, alot of time went into it, and alot of credit is going to be given..however..

I must admit it truely hurt at the end of the story, to find she went through so much, carried the burden and sufferd for so long..for a cheap laugh. Motherhood is the ultimate beauty mark, magic and witchs or not, she earned that mark.

I have no real love for the HP characters, but having read the books and watched the movies i can see a very large undertaken to make this story, again hats off to you.

The ending hurt me, personally, being a Mother i wouldnt be able to stand knowing my young where taken from me. Unwanted or not, unplaned, hated, and cruel..or not..she was still a Mother to be, and it hurts.

Thank you Chev, again, your work is top notch. Forgive the small Motherhood rant, i know folks just want there jollys rocked from such works, and dont really care about the chars, or how it happens.

Thank you again.

Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

great work on this, I especially like the twist at the end of it, I almost thought you were dead after all the time that passed between this and the last lost girls story(cant wait for the next one of those btw) anyway great work and Kaleigh Blue is an exeptional artist.

Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 4

I have enjoyed Cheviot's work in the past. This is a fine example of someone taking an idea and working to make an enjoyable story with a compelling storyline... that one WANTS to keep reading to see what happens next.

One disappointment, she didn't keep a little of that breast 'swelling' once it was all over. (Though I suppose that would be hard to explain in relation to the actual book/movie 'look'.)

Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 4

Very good story. Not just a 5 minutes work but a detailed and enjoyable story.

Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Excellent writing, just a little lacking in BE really.

Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

I love the fact that the story wasn't simply BE. Love your work so far and can't wait to see some more new stuff from you

Overall= 2, BE= 1, Characters= 3, Technical= 5

Great writing as usualy Chev, have always liked your stuff, back to Cheviots Place. :)

Definitely need some more BE in there since this is the 'overflowing' bra story site, more growth and what not would be nice.

Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 2, Technical= 5

I've never been a fan of the author's work, and this is no exception, but I have to congratulate him on finding a spell checker and a thesaurus- that puts him head and shoulders above 90% of the excrement passed off as stories on this site.

Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Not much BE, but the story itself was fantastic, and--most of the time, anyway--actually felt like a real HP novel, albeit fetish-oriented.

Overall= 4, BE= 2, Characters= 4, Technical= 4

Though it's light on BE (save some growth due to Hermione's... condition), a delightful read. Kudos on tracking down the right fonts for everything as well.

Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

While Hogwarts and all that potterish nonsense aren't meant for me, it certainly was an enjoyable story and this Carter Cheviot fellow is definitely a great writer who keeps improving with every story he writes

Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Illustrations rocked, whole story was really good

Overall= 3, BE= 1, Characters= 3, Technical= 5

way too slow, with almost no BE that I could find.

Overall= 4, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Great stuff. Very well written with likeable characters. The art is a great accompanyment and enhances the story.
A few minor punctuation errors but does not detract from the enjoyment.

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