Tom has a strange dream where he finds himself in the body of a woman... and sometimes dreams wind up being reality.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 3.20
- BE: 2.80
- Characters: 2.80
- Technical: 1.80
Ryver
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 2
I really enjoyed this short story; nice premise and sexy execution. Thankyou for sharing this.
Fuzzy
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 2
Not bad. Breasts could be bigger, but...;)
Anywho, I fiddled with the spelling/grammer/punctuation a bit, but have no way to send the results to you. Drop me an email at djheadmonkey@earthlink.net if you want me to send you the file.
joce37
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 2
I enjoyed this tale for the simple reason that the fantasy accords so closely with those of my own. The uncorrected spelling was a nuisance but for me this did not detract from the story's descriptive merits. (The author should either find time to correct it himself or find someone else [me??] to proof-read future stuff). I look forward to further stories of similar vein.
Kanodin
Overall= 2, BE= 2, Characters= 2, Technical= 2
80% of your writing problems are probably fixable by a remedial writing class and persistent practice. You have a good idea, but the invention process needs a lot of work.
aryanman
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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