Diane's secret is out and Patrick quickly gets her to try to revert the extreme growth he, she and Callie have experienced.
Callie has other plans, though...
Average Scores:
- Overall: 3.25
- BE: 3.25
- Characters: 3.25
- Technical: 3.00
strengthinobscurity
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
>tagged with fat growth
>complaining about fat
it was an excellent series.
0wl
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 3
This would be a good end to the story, but I definitely think you should write more stories. Some proofreading could be done.
As for the fat fetish part, I like it, obviously others don't. It's a matter of personal taste and this is a place for stories that will invariably involve all kinds of expansion. If it were an inflation story, I think people would react much differently, which really just means that if your own personal taste doesn't coincide with the story, maybe you should give it a pass instead of commenting on it.
aryanman
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1
fuck reasoning, this story sucked ass, who gets off to fat people? we're designed to be thin and agile not flabby and ridden of heart attacks and joint problems. this story blows and you fucking know it.
Squishy
Overall= 2, BE= 2, Characters= 2, Technical= 3
An extreme-fat fetish story more than a BE story, really. Cellulite = not sexy, IMO.
The reason the first part was much better was the way it was written. It was good not because it suddenly ended with her inflating to obesity; it was good because of the author's writing style. You failed to mimic that style, and your own style is rather bland.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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