This is my first story (we all have to start somewhere), and as a result I'd like some feedback.
The story is set in the fantasy world of Ecien and revolves around Mani, a girl who is chosen by an ancient Queen to rule the land and receive the curse.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.40
- BE: 3.80
- Characters: 4.00
- Technical: 4.00
Gojira
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
A little straightforward but very charming! I would like to read more like this!
fourshot
Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
I'd really like to read a fleshed out version. you have skills!
clib
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 3
I really enjoyed the story and setting. Some of your technique could use a little work (one thing I noticed was you sometimes seemed to change tenses in the same paragraph/sentence), but overall I thought it was a great job for your fist story. It's certainly better than anything I could do.
Blamandude
Overall= 4, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
Good characterization and writing style. A sequel would be great.
Mechfan9
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Very good story. But you forgot the "r" in her in chapter 7, that is the only mistake I found good work.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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