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The Overflowing Bra

Wishes for Madison...
Madison is your regular teenager.  But one night at a club allow guys' wishes upon her to take shape.  This is the beginning chapter of a longer story and my first.
Average Scores:

Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 4

Well done. What was nice is the heroine was not totally resigned to her fate. Shame that it's been so long that a continuation is unlikely.

Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

That story was PERFECT to my tastes!! Please continue it, I've never read anything so close to what I like!!

Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

hurry up with the next chapt

Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 4

Short Version: Moar! Please.

Long Version: Quite good, quite good indeed. The characters were a bit two dimensional (I couldn't discern any actual difference between the first and second antagonists. They were both the same cardboard-cutout villian; "Well, lookee here! A woman with a seemingly magical curse. I'd better take advantage of her!"), and the descriptions did have a kind of light feel, but the rest was rather nice, I thought.

I especially enjoyed the unorthodox nature of the second set of transformations. So many transformations are used so often (a fiery redhead, a bimbo-esque blonde, a servile asian, etc) that it's rather nice to have some variety.

If there are sequels planned, I would heartily endorse the further use of transformations that dance the line between odd(like the glasses and British elements) and outright weird(like multiple breasts and the like...not that there is anything wrong with multiple breasts, mind you.)

Also, a friend would be nice for her, especially if the "friend" starts out as antagonistic (if better realized) as the first two people that take advantage of her, but slowly warms to her and eventually apologizes. Or something along those lines.

Also, any plans perhaps for lesbianism? You can't go wrong with lesbianism!

in conclusion: Moar stories, with Moar odd TFs, Moar description of BE and Moar character development.

Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 3

Please, Please, Please continue. I am excited about the possibilities for continued change. I think more detail in the area of BE and her mental trauma from having changes forced upon her.

Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 4

Love the potential of this story line, would love to see more creative use of the wishes, making the BE related to outside influences rather than just what the wisher thinks.

Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 4

Good start with lots of promise, looking forward to more.

Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 4

Very nice. Looking forward to the second peice.

Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 4

I loved this mate, just plain awesome! Keep it up!

Captain Excellent
Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 2, Technical= 3

Great story. Obviously my personal preferences shouldn't get in the way of your writing style, but I think you should develop the characters a bit more. Especially the people who are taking advantage of Madison.

Also a suggestion for the upcoming chapters, which are looking to be promising. Maybe give Madison a friend, one who doesn't take advantage of her, so she can have someone to be the hero. It would be a shame if the only thing she did was have sex with random people.

Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 5

I wish you would write some more!

Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 3

Keep them coming great story I like the NC and trapped feeling your character has and how she is adjusting to her situations

Overall= 4, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 3

Very nice story! Hope it will be continued.

Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 5

Great story, can't wait for more!

Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Very good story, being a fan of AG myself i can tell this story is among the best. Cant wait to read more.

Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 4

I really enjoyed reading this story and can't wait for the sequal. I do hope that you be more elaberate with the BE though.

Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4

Great Story, like to read more

captainfixit (madmaximum)
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 5

A superior story, and definitely left me wanting more. The characters were a touch underdeveloped, although Madison was really the only one necessary to the plot and her development was fine (no pun intended :).
A little more description to the BE instead of just cup sizes, although I did enjoy the push-up compression description with the advent of the lingerie.
Also, I especially like the "adventure" type BE stories; can't wait to see what kind of micheif she gets into next!

Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4

All this story needs is a little more detail on the transformation and I'd fave it anyday

Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 4

The story was lots of fun. I hope you don't mind some suggestions:

1) They go out to listen to bands, but now there's only a juke box?
2) She gets injected, nearly raped, then is over it instantly? She should have run inside screaming for the cops. It makes no sense.
3) If you develop the story, I'd like to know more about the person who did this and why.
4) You have no description or character development of her friends, or the guys who take advantage of her. The transformations from the second guy didn't do much.
5) Personal preference: More detail on the BE scene

word, nigga
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 3

I really enjoyed this one. top notch work. madison's character is believable and likeable. the whole thing reminds me of the earlier parts of anne's worst nightmare, my personal favorite story. please keep up this story and you've got yourself a long term fan.

Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

The change of all of the different aspects of the character are great!

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