Out of my disatisfaction with expansion stories on the web I made this! Molly finds an interesting way to get back at her skinny tormenters from higschool. It involves a lot of ripping and button popping along the way........
Average Scores:
- Overall: 3.40
- BE: 2.90
- Characters: 2.10
- Technical: 3.10
Tal9922
Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 2, Technical= 2
I really liked this. Granted, I'm totally biased since I also have a fart fetish, but it was still nice to read. Only thing I didn't enjoy was the belly expansion/weight gain, I much orefer butt/breast expansion, but it was still cool. Keep it up!
HorseRadish
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 1, Technical= 3
Some minor spelling errors, but a decent premise.
some guy
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 2, Technical= 3
I hope your not getting flammed too much for the differences in this to some other stories (yeah the 'gas') but frankly I still think it's a great story. I was little put off at first, but I'm enjoying it after reading it again.
Please keep it up. Obviously you can change the catalyst to entice more readers if you want, but the technicality and descriptions in the story are great.
anonymous
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
I liked this a lot! I hope for more weight gain stories like this from you in the future! : )
satudo
Overall= 4, BE= 2, Characters= 1, Technical= 3
I rather enjoyed that one a bit more then I should have. I'm not really into the whole body expansion thing. The three or so brief breast expansions should have left me somewhat dissatisfied. However the individual situations and descriptions of the layout were rather good. Much better then the character detail i might add. You hit a wide variety of arch-types, now you just need to grab 2 or 3 at a time and detail it out more.
That would be something interesting indeed.
Anonymous
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 2, Technical= 4
The one thing that always confuses me about these sort of stories is this: When people belch/fart, they're *expelling* gasses. So why the hell does that make bits of them get *bigger*?
Charfield
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
I really like the idea (so i am looking forward to the second piece) but like gman1 said, if you could slow down just a little, it would benefit the story
gman1
Overall= 3, BE= 2, Characters= 2, Technical= 3
Nice premises, don't mind the farts but slow down. The growth was okay, but we stop caring about who is expanded, why, and what actually happened.
Phoe
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1
Prepare to be torched along the way!
Farts? ye right.....
ge5000
Overall= 1, BE= 3, Characters= 1, Technical= 3
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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