I must say, these two were a very, very fine read. I honestly enjoyed your cheerful style and I like the overall direction the plot seems to be taking. It's nice that You didn't adamantly hold ground in the realm of overflowing breasts, but adequately expanded to nearby territories of lactation and all-body modification. And as in a real battle, a little tentacle rape is always a small victory.
Personally, I'm a fan of all kinds of body (and mind) transformations, as long as they are lengthy, bountiful and entertaining for both me and the character(s) of the tale. It's so sinfully delicious, how rarely concepts like 'too big' and 'too much' or even 'too many' and 'too wierd' exist in these stories.
I only wish the actual text were a tad longer. I mean, there is nothing better to completely and utterly destroy a good story than pointless and overtaxed and copletely irrelevant and excessively strained and hyperextended and totally unnecessary abundace of thoroughly über-lenghtened adjectives and descriptions, not to mention overuse of too long and flowing sentences (of course, there was also bad grammar & typops), and while a good writer rather makes do with a couple of words fewer than use too many, prose like this really needs descriptions. Descriptions of characters, of surroundings, of paraphernalia, but most importantly, full and arousing descriptions of events and actions. Not too long and cumbersome, but exactly sufficient and up for the occasion. And the lusher and wilder, the better.
Now, I didn't mean to imply that the two stories in question were seriously lacking in these departments, that would be untrue. They managed to get the point across well and were thus rather.. um.. stimulating. They also had that special charm that separates good from the medicore and the text was well flowing and smooth to read. However, they seemed a bit unpolished, not completely finished. And short. But that's nitpicking. After all, as You said, this is still a work in progress, and if these really were a product of just a few nights, then IMHO they are a really admirable accomplishment - I indeed wish I could do it that well!
So thanks for providing us with some quality entertainment and good luck writing more!
(As for the name for she-who-once-was-Jessica, I'd like to nominate Leana - a name nice sounding and also bearing resemblance to 'liana' - so it shoud fit the theme;)
