The Definitive BE Story Archive

The Overflowing Bra

Ed Miller
MASTER PC: Self-Experimentation PART 2
In part one, Ed changes himself into a hyper-hootered girl using Master PC loaded on his girlfriend's computer.  That leads to a night out of fun and frolic, but when he comes home and finds his girlfriend has deleted the program, he starts to panic.  Part two continues Ed's adventure as a unintentionally permanent member of the fairer sex, and since it's an Ed Miller story, he continues to get fairer and fairer!
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Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 3

Just a quick note, if you copy and paste this story into a word pad, it automatically formats itself. 3s across the board, due to having to fill in all fields in order to post a reply.

Overall= 4, BE= 2, Characters= 2, Technical= 4

There's no way this is actually an Ed Miller story. It's done in his style sure, but it's not written by him. Doesn't have the same feel/phrasing/inventiveness and certainly lacks his much more descriptive attention to detail. It's a nice try though. Still not a bad read I guess, but nothing really happens, the descriptions are relatively poor and there's pretty much no character development whatsoever.

That being said, if I'm wrong, and this is Ed, I'm very glad to see you writing again and hope to see lots more from you... but this just doesn't sound like your older stuff at all.

Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1

I usually like Ed Miller stories and I would like this one if I could read it. Its just one big paragraph and too much to try and make out and digest.

Wild Card
Overall= 2, BE= 3, Characters= 2, Technical= 4

The story isn't bad, its just that it ain't my kind of story.
I find the information about the characters a bit lacking.

@cjpos, First off all, did you actually read it before you rated the story?
You might want to try wordpad, works as a charm for me.

Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1

Can we get something in HTML? Can't read Linux or whatever flavor of unix u r using.

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