The conclusion.
I sat up all night reading the series, getting a bit upset at the repetition and the dropping of the stupidity end of the curse, but the ending was a HUGE disappointment.
Giving her to the loathsome character in the coffee shop said a lot about your personality which you might want to think about. I fully expected the doctor to return and save the day, having used the technology to solve his problems with sex.
Oh well, what do I know...the amount of sadism displayed in many of this sites stories mark ME as being the weirdo here...
Greatest
This story is much better than the ratings give it credit. My favorite story on the site so far, specifically the last 3 chapters. I only think it ended a little abruptly and could have used more tom + ann time at the end
This is how not to end a story.
New readers should stop at chapter 10.
This is an awesome series. It often goes in directions that don't appeal to me personally, but that in no way diminishes from its quality. Many, many pages appeal to me very much.
What I want doesn't matter, but I wanted the stranger to make a comeback, and for it to be revealed that the ordeal was to make Ann stronger. I would have identified with Tom if he was a nice person who honestly thought that Ann really wanted to play that way (and was not overweight).
I especially liked the intelligence put into this story. I liked how chlorine made her look younger. This story was perfectly setup to go one more chapter. I very much look forward to more by The Stranger!
Oh. My. God.
What the hell happened? The first 10 or so chapters were amazing! Suddenly though Tom is introduced and...well it goes from poor girl suffering through sexy stuff to sexually assaulted and suffering. What happened to the semi-lighthearted fun? Perhaps the stranger's curse didn't have to be lifted, but an ending like that? Couldn't she have regained some control and bitten his cock off? Perhaps reached the ultimate level of humiliation and become some semblance of herself?
I'm so utterly disappointed with this ending. You were doing incredibly until the introduction of Tom and the lack of punishment towards his behavior. It is a shame this series ended so poorly.
And here's me hoping this series would never end! =( Im very suprised that you decided to end it like that. Maybe its just me but I was kind of hoping for a happy ending for Ann. I still love the series but it was definitly more of a turn-on back when ann did wishes.
Please keep writing!
Though it wrapped up quickly, in terms of impact it was back up there with the early ones. Great series and will look forward to anything you write in the future.
I can honestly say that this has been one of my favorite series on this site, and to see it end like this, I truly am disappointed. The last few chapters did not have the same tension as the rest of the story, and the introduction of sexual acts in the final chapter I feel lowered the story to a place where it didnt belong. It really felt like your enthusiasm for the characters and plot pretty much vanished here.
Overall thought, an exellent story and 10 chapters which I will read again!
Overall, this has been one of my favorite stories on this site (Good story. I write quite a bit myself, but not BE stories). Despite what others have said, I liked the coffee shop chapters just as much as the rest of them... all except the last chapter. I agree with the others. I'm not being mean, but it did end rather abruptly. And I wanted to see things turn out good for Ann. Have her find a way to remove the curse or something. Not being forced to be a sex slave. I'd like to see you go back and modify the ending to something better but I guess you've ended it and you probably won't. If not, I look forward to your next story (Just please do a better ending next time)
Its almost as if another writer wrote this and used the Ann's Nightmare title and the authors name without permission. It just felt off, and the way she caved in when she didn't do the things willingly for the previous 12 chapters. Ending it this way did feel like you either got sick of it or that its a fake chapter.
I'm horribly disappointed, for a few reasons. One, this is the end of my favorite series on this site. Two, it ended very, very quickly. Three, it sold out. This story had never been about sex and sexual acts (other than her being nude, which is entirely different) and then we suddenly have her giving this guy a blowjob, showing a serious de-evolution in the series' plot.
I know The Stranger can do better than this, I'm gonna continue ignoring this version of the story until a new, better one is released. Too bad, I was really looking forward to giving this the great score a great series would deserve.
Wow, I did not like the way it abruptly ended, although I did like the series in general. Perhaps if you get the itch you could modify the ending to something a little less disappointing.
She fought it for so long and so hard. She should have found a BALANCE between her animal lusts and her academic frigidity. It was disappointing to see her succumb so quickly to what was such a brief, ineffectual, and therefore ultimately unbelievable final sequence of "reconditioning".
This story had so much potential.
But you know, in some ways I sympathize. I've written stories before that were just too big that I couldn't rein them in, and wound up pasically just cutting the plot short.
Sorry, this was more than rushed, your enthusiasm from the first story to this one went from through the roof of heaven, to below the sub basement of hell... not only did this story seemed rushed, there were too many open ends at the end of the story.
There was never any closure, and in all honesty, I really don't think "And they lived happily ever after." would be considered a true statement either. As per your own rules of this "story series" she regains control of herself after she comes down from her own sexual high...
I'm not one to be overly picky with stories, but you are in many cases a known author, and have been recognized as a good author by JR Parz, this though severely goes under par.
I am going to give you some advice that I was given a long time ago.
Drop the stories for a while, and come back and clean them up, or don't come back at all. You either are writing because you enjoy writing or you don't... come back to it, and find out what you really think.
You have the potential for being a very good writer, but you really need to come back at a later date and re-write the last few chapters, they neither really went with the story, nor did they truly have closure either, which by the sounds of it, a lot of people, including myself want. Either that or leave it open ended, and let other writers take the reigns.
I thought this series was extremely good, and I hate to admit that I was disappointed with this ending, I guess you got tired of this storyline? thanks for all the effort, I hope you keep writing.
Okay, okay, I won't be as harsh as the others, but seriously. There is no real closure. The Stranger, The Doctor and the countless other characters didn't come back in the end. I need closure. And I was wanting a more detailed description of Ann's descent into... well, you know. But the previous chapters were great. So, Bravo!
It's like you just got sick of writing it. Ugh.
wtf? it got so bad towards the end, but it was so good at the beginning! oh well, now you can start on a new and more focused story ya? you probably have a better idea of how to make a complete story now, so the direction will be much better. enjoyed the series as a whole very much
Wha? Truth be told Chapters 1-4 still remain my favorite section of the novella, which overall scores highly, the review given above reflects just this 'part.' It just sort of ends, but, my break down of the entire 13 parts is as follows;
Overall Enjoyment; 4
BE Description: 3
Characters: 4
Technical quality: 5
Bravo, Stranger!! I really enjoyed your story over all, especially the final chapter. Though the conclusion of which I've been waiting to read about the whole time finally came, it was far far too short to really satisfy me. Perhaps you could make a longer, more detailed ending!! I would really love to read about just how big she would end up being in her relationship with Tom.
great collection!