The Definitive BE Story Archive

The Overflowing Bra

First Workz
Genie-therapy part 1
first part of a story, this will be my last attempt at trying to break into professional writing of BE based
Average Scores:

Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1

i did not under stand it at all.

Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

man this is the best stories iv reed on this site it has every thing iv bin looking for plz mack the next one i cant wait!!

Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 3

Is there going to be more of this story? I want to see what happens next...

Devon boy D. (author)
Overall= 3, BE= 2, Characters= 3, Technical= 2

a message for "Kendra",

If you e-mail me, i'll write you your own BE story

Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 3

Enjoyable though, at times, not easy to follow what is happening.

Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 3

I'm enjoying the story so far, keep up the good work! Looking forward to the next chapter.

Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 1

Good detail. Not as much as I like normally. But a good story none the less. Just need to get the grammar down. Because frankly, its terrible at the moment.

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