Felecia has fantasies of having her tits blow up like balloons and a new shop in town might just have what she needs.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 2.33
- BE: 3.00
- Characters: 2.67
- Technical: 1.33
Fleeting Sanity
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 1
Ok i'll keep the preg thing in mind form now on thanks for the heads up.
deux_anges
Overall= 2, BE= 3, Characters= 2, Technical= 2
Started off OK but paragraph structure a bit messy and made it difficult to read/follow.
Story tagged "preg" but having one single mention of an inflated belly doesn't qualify.
lwl
Overall= 2, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 1
The dire need for basic editing (sentence and paragraph structure, spelling, grammar, capitalization and punctuation) greatly detracted from the story line and its enjoyment. For example, a new paragraph should be started upon change of speaker or point of view.
Find someone capable to edit your stories before submission.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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