With Steven taken over by his own corrupted touch, things are not looking well for the pure and innocent Nicole when she's invited by Steven to come by.
Effects completely dominate over causes as we witness the happenings of this fateful night.
(part 2 concludes this story)
Average Scores:
- Overall: 3.83
- BE: 3.17
- Characters: 4.00
- Technical: 4.33
zymurgy
Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Really loved the way Nicole turned out after all the build up in part 1. Keep writing.
Like the first part, some mispellings and misused words, but nothing too major.
Matt0529
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
Forget that comment about the silicone being a TURNOFF! This site is full of natural breasts! We NEED a selection of artifical breasts for those of us who prefer their boobs firm, large and FAKE!
Also, the snotty, bitchy, artifical-ness of the characters was what made this story so wonderful and fantastic!! PLEASE!! Write more!!
TREMENDOUS WORK! THANK YOU!!!
bobby
Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
I really enjoyed both the two parts of this story but now I want a "The touch part 3" ;-)
Mr. Rolyat
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
I've enjoyed both parts of your story now. I really enjoy the destructive tendency of your characters as well as your choice in women, sadistic and misogynistic. It's nice and refreshing to have a story where evil is the protaganist and, as Steve said, the effects were so fucking interesting!. The transformations are wonderful, the contrast from their innocent beginning to their corrupted end, Nicole's change could of been more descriptive in the physical and after transformation areas like Stephanie's was but oh well. I hope this isn't the end please let us know what you plan to do in the future with this.
HeliumGirl
Overall= 1, BE= 2, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
Sorry, I don't like stories where everyone winds up evil in the end. I don't mind evil *winning* at the end of a story, but I don't like the protagonists succumbing and converting to evil. And when a story involves magic, why use that magic to retroactively introduce scientific BE in a self-healing timeline? Why not have it so that the characters 'always had' naturally enormous breasts, when you have the limitless realm of magic to work from? And if the idol was dark on one side and light on the other, why wasn't there the fairly obvious conceit that Steve's right hand conferred good things onto people the way the left hand conferred bad things?
Anon A. Mous
Overall= 2, BE= 2, Characters= 2, Technical= 4
Okay a harsh review of the whole story and not just this part, sorry. This is not meant to be discouraging. You have the ability to write and the creativity. I would have liked better descriptions of the way reality was changing around steve, as well as better descriptions of the BE. I love this type of story but the drugs and all of the tits being silicone was a real turn-off. Let's see what else you can do!
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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