Vikky surprise her boyfriend one day by growing huge for him, all while attempting to bake a cake.
I do`t regret that spent a few of minutes for reading. Write more often, surely'll come to read something new!...
Just a quick reply, but actually just saying your work is copyrighted (or trade marked/has reserved rights) does give very limited protection as intellectual property. For what it's worth.
Where to start?
The "furries" thing is a non issue. People read these stories specifically for their favorite form of fetish-based content.. and since this is NOT a anthropomorphic fetish site, the inclusion of "yiffs" is totally irrellevant.. it's all about 'dem boobs, people!! And as long as you cover the bases of what people come here for, you can count yourself successful as a writer of "erotic fiction" such as can be found here. And, sadly, on that note this story falls far, far short. Now, there are about a hundred ways to go into detail and length regarding breast expansion (Or belly, or dick growth, or whatever the fuck you feel like creating at that given time) but the only important thing is the DETAIL! I'd be willing to bet my bong that not one of the people who complained about the furries in this story would have opened their mouth to whine if the BE was more in depth, descriptive, and "erotic" (very subjective term, used here loosely). I know that a lot of folks around here harbor delusions of being great storytellers and spinners of intricate plots, but the sad truth is that people read these stories while trying to get off.. and if aforementioned story fails to arouse, then it's a failure despite the descriptiveness of the characters and cleverness of plot. Everything takes a backseat to the necessity of making the story load-blowing hot.. and this story is most definately not. Origional? Yes, I suppose.. seeing that there are no other cake-baking lioness BE stories on here. But you missed the sexy mark by about a mile. USE MORE IN-DEPTH DESCRIPTION!!! "She purred happily as she grew" is fine, but doesn't quite compare to a actual full-fleshed paragraph on the growth and the effects (Physical and otherwise) on the growee... And yes, i'm stabbing at you for those wussy little short paragraphs this story is made up of entirely. Your writing style and grammar are good, but you need to invest a lot more thought and effort into a story if you want it to be greeted with open arms by this community. And on a side note, what the fuck is it with everyone trying to say "This is copyrighted!". NONE OF THIS CRAP IS FUCKING COPYRIGHTED, PEOPLE!!! Just because you say "This is copyrighted" does NOT mean that it is in ANY legal sense! Just quit trying to sound official and cool, dipshits... your not going to convince a single person that you actually took the time to legally copyright and file paperwork on your little two-night long word perfect beat-off project.
I don't know what everyone is so up in arms over the furries for... Especially considering thatat least these characters are presumably legal- as opposed to the slew of highschoolers that can be found in a lot of other stories...
The fact that they were furries didn't lend too much to the story IMHO, but it didn't make it any worse. I'd have actually liked to see more cultural or otherwise in-character things that would have made the fact that she has cat ears and tail (and him being a fox) more significant.
Like Julikat in Julikat's Seduction, the idea of the catgirl is interesting, but largely irrelevant, especially in the face (ha ha ha) of swelling boobies.
I enjoyed the story. The only problem that I had was towards the end, around while she's mixing the cake, her size gets a little blurry, rather quickly. I know that she's big enough to have to reach around them, but it seemed to me that it happened... suddenly, without much description.
Anyway, I hope that you're not deterred from writing again; I think that you're on to something.
Definately need to warn in advance of the furry.
Please warn in the description that the story is furry. Also, did you have permission to post this? The endnote seemed rather against distribution. An average story all around, compounded with the furries.
It's not that I have a moral problem with them (although I think it's odd, and the bestiality subculture within the fetish *does* raise my ire), it's just that furry writers seem to have a hard time grasping that the rest of us don't get off on constant reminders that the characters are anthropomorphic. They (generally) add details that mean nothing to someone not connected to the fetish (in this case, nonsense about her parentage making the growth possible, while it worked just as well to assume the pills did it all by their lonesome!) Yes, you can say that "well, it's not written for people like you". If that's the case, don't post it outside your insular little communities!
Should've told the audience in advance that this was a 'furries' story.
meh. wouldn't have wasted my time had the description said it was all furries.
Not half bad at all. I personally would have liked their to be some more dialoge between the two charactes but the descriptions and story were smooth and solid. Good work, would like to see a second installment