quadhouse@yahoo.com
There's BE, and Time travel, and, uh, more BE.
It's hard to descibe. Read it already.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.50
- BE: 4.50
- Characters: 4.50
- Technical: 4.00
some guy
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
A competent work, but one I feel did not deserve the first prize.
I found the numberisms offputting. 188 inches! What does that look like? We have no idea. (Chelsea Charms has a 60-somethingish inch bust and volume increases cubically relative to linear measure. My back of the envelope math indicates each breast of a 188-inch bust should weigh 200+ pounds or something like that...) Perhaps the writer could describe the difficulties a woman with 144-inch breasts might have fitting through doors or, indeed, walking, standing, or squatting unaided.
While I appreciated the time travel plot, the jumpiness of the writng made it difficult to follow. It could be made more comprehensible without sacrificing the effect or insulting the reader's intelligence.
yiven
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
Wonderful. Interesting and original plot with strong characters and great BE description. Admittedly the plot got a little confusing at times, but it was still a fantastic read and I hope you continue to contribute your fine work. There are a bunch of spelling errors however (ones that spell check wouldn't pick up) like she's/she'd, breast/breasts,fee/ feet, fro/for etc nothing a quick run through wouldn't take care of. Keep up the awesome work!
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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