The Definitive BE Story Archive

The Overflowing Bra

Wolf
zacharygreen1@hotmail.co.uk
The Grail
The true story of the Grail.....
Average Scores:

iceowl
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 4

I good old fashioned BE story, with just the right amounts of everything I like to see. Unfortunately, rather short. Please make more.

deux_anges
Overall= 3, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4

Agree with Iceowl, a good plot but too short!

nobody
Overall= 3, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4

This is a good start to the story. I appreciate how little the characters like each other, and some of the mystery involved. Another few chapters to flesh them out and the plot and this could really be going somewhere.

hmm
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 4

great beginning

Somaholidaye
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 4

Excellent story, continue on with it...it seems like it is getting quite interesting.

Anon
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 4

A few small spelling/grammatical errors (tour instead of tore) but overall a very good start for a great story. however, i'd like to see the guy drink from the graile rather than her... and then they can satisfy their thirst with each other... ;)

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