First story in the State of Emergency series. Bobby accepts an invitation to meet his lover's lover. How is he to know that his lover's lover's lover just gave her a new toy to play with? Unforeseen but desperately wished for consequences ensue.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.58
- BE: 3.67
- Characters: 3.92
- Technical: 4.17
Soy
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
Overall I truely Enjoyed this and want to see more. It has so much variety in it that realy seals the deal.
Bish
Overall= 4, BE= 2, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Very nice. Are there more?
Legacyguy
Overall= 4, BE= 2, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
It has potential. The title doesn't fit the story at all. BE is there towards the end, but lacking in descriptions. Need more and it was too rushed in the later half.
moof
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Bizarre! Strange! I love it!
IceOwl
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
I love stories that involve so much transformation.. please write more?
cool guy
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Redog
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Good story. Got right to the action. I love transformation stories like this. It does seem a little rushed to the finish though, but anyway, write more!
DarkHeart
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Interesting start, looking forward to seeing more.
My only complaint was that the characters seemed to have taken the changes a little too calmly.
Anonymous
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
nobody
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
A really good story. Some more editing and fleshing out could make it a classic. One thing I would point out is that if there's no reason to use a PDF format, like there isn't in this story, then you should probably use something more portable like .rtf or .txt. I agree that the characters seemed a little blase and a little bit thin...in fact, when I found out about the two female lovers and their "escapades" at their respective workplaces, I really wanted the story to have started far before it did! Let me get to know these two nymphos, then change them.
Soy
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
I truely enjoyed this story, and certainly I hope there is more of this to come.
a guy
Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
excellent story, would love to see more
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